I'm Working On A Novel

[McLeod]

So I decided to get creative again remembering how much I used to write when I was younger. So I've started a fantasy novel over at fiction press, here is the link!

https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3212473/1/Beyond

Knowing that I probably won't be noticed over there I decided that I'm going to post it over here for reviews and criticism, hopefully I won't regret this.

[Fozy]

Wow more than 300 words!

[Mystiquε]

 

I can definitely see the profanity in this one. 

[McLeod]

 

 

I can definitely see the profanity in this one. 

 

The M rating was a more of a precaution because I'm probably going to write stuff that is M-Rated without noticing

 

 

Wow more than 300 words!

It's a prologue, I'll follow up with a chapter that will be probably 3k

[Fozy]

I look forward to reading more, creativity is a wonderful thing. Don't see it enough around here!

[McLeod]

I look forward to reading more, creativity is a wonderful thing. Don't see it enough around here!

Wait, Fozy, are you being sincere? Holy shit, I feel like I've achieved the impossible

[Fozy]

Yes.

[McLeod]

Hopefully I can actually pull off this story, last time I got somewhere was in 2013 with 18 chapters but I don't really count it as it was fan fiction of Assassin's Creed, the furthest I got was when I was 7 in 2008 with 120 pages but I lost that all when the fan blew up on the computer.

[fufu ÷]

If I was gonna read anything, it sure as well wont be anything written by a damn cat.

[Mystiquε]

I doubt he's really a feline tho.

[fufu ÷]

he's clearly a pussy

[DrJoeyMagnum]

I like what you wrote so far man

[McLeod]

he's clearly a pussy

Well you're clearly a small asian girl, ha!

 

I like what you wrote so far man

Thanks for the feedback

Edited August 19, 2014 by McLeod

[Paul.™]

I'm actually confused with how many fufu's there are.

Here's this one that's (surposedly) female and is twelve (or thirteen) and Olivia's internet boyfriend Alex.

Am I talking shit here.

[McLeod]

I'm actually confused with how many fufu's there are.

Here's this one that's (surposedly) female and is twelve (or thirteen) and Olivia's internet boyfriend Alex.

Am I talking shit here.

No, I think shit is just dribbling from your lips

[Mystiquε]

 Olivia's internet boyfriend

 lolnostalgia 

[Chris3:16]

Interesting start thus far. Still a little bit early to really to give any suggestions, though, but I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

[Miz_fit]

he's clearly a pussy

Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality?  If neither then I'm confused?

[McLeod]

 

he's clearly a pussy

Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality?  If neither then I'm confused?

 

Avatar; I actually have a huge manliness in my pants and everybody knows it

Edited August 19, 2014 by McLeod

[Paul.™]

he's clearly a pussy

Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality? If neither then I'm confused?

Avatar; I actually have a huge manliness in my pants and everybody knows it

Everyone knows that...

[Fozy]

Please, no more terrible quality gifs.

[ajleesus]

Looks cool

[McLeod]

Thanks Jay

[Miztah Raza]

I really like it! Good work dude!

[jitz]

I'm going to pass on some advice a teacher gave me in high school.

"Ahhh you're writing your biography Chris, you're a bit young but I suppose it's never too early to start", the teacher encouraged. Chris paused in thought for a moment, clearly puzzled by the teacher's statement. He hadn't been working on his biography, what lay before him were wondrous worlds of fiction. Worlds full of ghastly beasts, worlds in peril, and undoubtedly worlds of poor spelling and questionable punctuation. "Nah it's a story, I'm just making it up as I go" Chris corrected the enquiring fountain of knowledge whom made simple mistake.

The teacher reached for Chris' shoulder, wanting his full attention. Chris feeling the student-teacher physical boundaries collapsing all around him, turned over his shoulder to see the moderately paid, Government employed, surprisingly cheery teacher with a large smile on her face. Fear overcome him, he's fucked up, they must have meant to be writing a biography. The teacher broke her smile, the fountain of knowledge was about the burst it's banks. "If it's not a biography, why are you narrating in the first person? It's unnecessarily limiting from a storytelling perspective, you can only say what happened in presence of the narrator. What if you want to set up a villain? You'll have to change your entire storytelling structure mid-story, it doesn't work".

Chris' fear was realised, he had fucked up, he now had five pages to re-write.