McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 So I decided to get creative again remembering how much I used to write when I was younger. So I've started a fantasy novel over at fiction press, here is the link! https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3212473/1/Beyond Knowing that I probably won't be noticed over there I decided that I'm going to post it over here for reviews and criticism, hopefully I won't regret this. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fozy Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 Wow more than 300 words! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mystiquε Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 I can definitely see the profanity in this one. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 I can definitely see the profanity in this one. The M rating was a more of a precaution because I'm probably going to write stuff that is M-Rated without noticing Wow more than 300 words! It's a prologue, I'll follow up with a chapter that will be probably 3k Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fozy Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 I look forward to reading more, creativity is a wonderful thing. Don't see it enough around here! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 I look forward to reading more, creativity is a wonderful thing. Don't see it enough around here! Wait, Fozy, are you being sincere? Holy shit, I feel like I've achieved the impossible Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fozy Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 Yes. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 Hopefully I can actually pull off this story, last time I got somewhere was in 2013 with 18 chapters but I don't really count it as it was fan fiction of Assassin's Creed, the furthest I got was when I was 7 in 2008 with 120 pages but I lost that all when the fan blew up on the computer. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fufu ÷ Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 If I was gonna read anything, it sure as well wont be anything written by a damn cat. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mystiquε Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 I doubt he's really a feline tho. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fufu ÷ Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 he's clearly a pussy Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DrJoeyMagnum Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 I like what you wrote so far man Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 (edited) he's clearly a pussy Well you're clearly a small asian girl, ha! I like what you wrote so far man Thanks for the feedback Edited August 19, 2014 by McLeod Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul.™ Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 I'm actually confused with how many fufu's there are. Here's this one that's (surposedly) female and is twelve (or thirteen) and Olivia's internet boyfriend Alex. Am I talking shit here. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 I'm actually confused with how many fufu's there are. Here's this one that's (surposedly) female and is twelve (or thirteen) and Olivia's internet boyfriend Alex. Am I talking shit here. No, I think shit is just dribbling from your lips Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mystiquε Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 Olivia's internet boyfriend lolnostalgia Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chris3:16 Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 Interesting start thus far. Still a little bit early to really to give any suggestions, though, but I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miz_fit Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 he's clearly a pussy Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality? If neither then I'm confused? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 19, 2014 Author Share Posted August 19, 2014 (edited) he's clearly a pussy Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality? If neither then I'm confused? Avatar; I actually have a huge manliness in my pants and everybody knows it Edited August 19, 2014 by McLeod Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Paul.™ Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 he's clearly a pussy Did you get that because of his avatar, novel or personality? If neither then I'm confused? Avatar; I actually have a huge manliness in my pants and everybody knows it Everyone knows that... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fozy Posted August 19, 2014 Share Posted August 19, 2014 Please, no more terrible quality gifs. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ajleesus Posted August 20, 2014 Share Posted August 20, 2014 Looks cool Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
McLeod Posted August 20, 2014 Author Share Posted August 20, 2014 Thanks Jay Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miztah Raza Posted August 23, 2014 Share Posted August 23, 2014 I really like it! Good work dude! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jitz Posted August 23, 2014 Share Posted August 23, 2014 I'm going to pass on some advice a teacher gave me in high school. "Ahhh you're writing your biography Chris, you're a bit young but I suppose it's never too early to start", the teacher encouraged. Chris paused in thought for a moment, clearly puzzled by the teacher's statement. He hadn't been working on his biography, what lay before him were wondrous worlds of fiction. Worlds full of ghastly beasts, worlds in peril, and undoubtedly worlds of poor spelling and questionable punctuation. "Nah it's a story, I'm just making it up as I go" Chris corrected the enquiring fountain of knowledge whom made simple mistake. The teacher reached for Chris' shoulder, wanting his full attention. Chris feeling the student-teacher physical boundaries collapsing all around him, turned over his shoulder to see the moderately paid, Government employed, surprisingly cheery teacher with a large smile on her face. Fear overcome him, he's fucked up, they must have meant to be writing a biography. The teacher broke her smile, the fountain of knowledge was about the burst it's banks. "If it's not a biography, why are you narrating in the first person? It's unnecessarily limiting from a storytelling perspective, you can only say what happened in presence of the narrator. What if you want to set up a villain? You'll have to change your entire storytelling structure mid-story, it doesn't work". Chris' fear was realised, he had fucked up, he now had five pages to re-write. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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